October 4th, 2005
Poem (Genre 2)
I Am
I am autistic
I wonder if I will ever be like the other kids
I hear the wheels in my head turning trying to think of something to say
I see myself talking to those I barely know
I want to be able to play with everyone on the playground
I am autistic
I pretend that I am just like the other kids
I feel like I am trapped in a cage sometimes
I touch the bars that keep me from playing and talking with everyone else
I worry that I will never escape
I cry because these bars have kept me trapped for so long
I am autistic
I understand that I will need someone to help me become free from this cage
I say that one day it will be okay
I dream about running on the playground will all of my friends
I try my best to let people know it is alright to talk to me
I hope that one day I will not have to worry about any of this
I am autistic
cstout1982
2. Audience: General Public
3. Say Back: The author is saying that
being autistic is like being in a cage and she wants to be normal like everyone else and just play.
4. Bless: I really like the lines that compare autism to being trapped in a cage and touching the bars and dreaming of escape.
5. You may want to put the line "I worry that I will never escape" after the line "I understand that..." This keeps all the lines with words "cage" and "bars" close together.
blackwell3
2. Audience: general public
3. Say Back: The author is trying to describe the emotions of a child with autism, how hes want to live and play like the other kids, and how he feels trapped by his condition.
4. Bless: I liked the line in this poem about being trapped inside a cage, it gives a good illustration of what it might be like to be autistic.
5. Address: In your lines that say "I am autistic" you possibly add another word or two to describe the child. Just a suggestion... :)